From: Response to written commentary in preparation for high-stakes second language writing assessment
Category | Value | Example comment |
---|---|---|
Focus | Task response | This seems to be very similar to the previous point you made in the previous paragraphs |
 | Coherence and cohesion | Just one thing, the pronoun reference word ‘it’ is a bit unclear in main body paragraph 2 and ‘them’ in the conclusion |
 | Lexical resource | Try to change the unusual general vocabulary that I’ve highlighted, which sound unnatural |
 | Grammatical range and accuracy | I was impressed with the range and quality of structures |
 | Other | This is a very good essay, good job! |
Length | Short (1–5 words) |  |
 | Average (6–19) |  |
 | Long (20–49) |  |
 | Very long (50 +) |  |
Explicitness | Explicit | Perhaps add ‘people from different countries or cultures’ to be more precise |
 | Implicit | I feel this point is rather similar to your previous main argument |
 | Revisions not required | Body paragraph 1 has a good concluding sentence |
Semantic function | Advisory | I’d use cautious language here to avoid overgeneralising: ‘that can result’ |
 | Criticism | I don’t understand what you mean here |
 | Descriptive | The points you make are relevant, extended, and supported |
 | Imperative | Combine into one word |
 | Praise | Another good topic-specific item |
 | Question posing | Could you give an example of this? |
 | Reflective | Wow. I had no idea the complex was so large. But I’m not surprised, there are so many amazing sights there |
Provision of mitigation strategy | Hedges | Perhaps say ‘need to’ |
 | Interrogative syntax | Is there a more academic sounding word? |
 | Paired act/positive softener | This is OK, but is there a more academic sounding word? |
 | Personal attribution | I think ‘Take for example the country Spain, where…’ sounds more appropriate as you’re writing only about Spain |
 | None | Replace with ‘the personality of the actor’ |